Hello everyone. I just registered to this site the other day so that I could get some tips and skills on how to make a good game for RPG Maker 2. I've been working on the story and characters so far and this is what I've come up with. Please let me know what you think of it. I want criticism whether it is positive or negative. It will only help my game get better. Oh yeah and I can't explain too much about the party members because it would give away important parts of the game.

A Warrior Within
Party Members (note that you will only start off with David at the beginning):
David (half elf, half human) - mother is a powerful elf magician and father is the leader of the Avon blood knights. He was forced to flee from his home when the Emperor of Avon sent his army to destroy them.

Ayna (elf warrior) - she is the commander of the riverside forest elves. Finds David in Riverside forest unconscious and decides to help him when she hears his story of how he ended up in their forest.

Cecil (rebel leader) - as a favor to Ayna, he hides David from the empire. After a certain event unfolds, he swears allegiance and undying loyalty to David until the empire is destroyed.

Janemba (dragon warrior) - the last known dragon to exist in the land. his strength was unmatched and his dragon magic was twice the power of any other dragon. he loses his enormous size and most of his powers in order to save a child from dying. although his magic and form is gone, his strength is still considered unmatched by anyone.

Jami (mystic) - last known survivor from the magic city of Sharnel. She along with the former dragon Janemba are seeking out the ones who destroyed her village when she was younger.

Other Important Characters:
Lord Marconis: leader of the Avon blood knights and father to David

Madeline: former high summoner of the Riverside forest elves. Also the elf that fell in love with Marconis and mother of David

Gustav: The newly crowned emperor of Avon. He wages war against every race in their country. He also aligns himself with the ferocious ogre tribe, the mighty warlocks (giants), and the snake people.

Now hear's how the beginning of the story unfolds so far:

When Emperor Gondor ruled the kingdom of Avon he devoted his entire life to having peace with the other races. With the help of his youngest but most valiant knight, Lord Marconis, he was able to establish peace with the races surrounding his kingdom. With peace established Marconis left the kingdom and journeyed to the city of Riverside to start a new life. On his way there he was ambushed by bandits. He killed them all but was injured very badly. When he finally regained consciousness, he saw that his wounds were healed and a mysterious elf named Madeline was watching over him. They eventually fall in love and have David. Years later David has now become a teenager and Lord Marconis is leaving for Avon. It seems that the emperor has died and his son Emperor Gustav has summoned all of his best knights to return to Avon. While Marconis is away David learns magic from his mother and learns to use a sword by hunting in the forest of Riverside. Three years later Marconis returns from Avon and brings a squad of knights with him. They capture his wife and go out looking for David, who is hunting. When he returns, the knights injure him badly and Lord Marconis kills Madeline right in front of David. This triggers David to lose control. After he kills the guards and injures his father, he vows that he will let his father live to see him destroy the empire and then he will kill him. David then runs off into Riverside forest. As he regains control of himself, he passes out. In the middle of patrol of the forest, Ayna and some of her elf knights find David and take him to shelter. Well that's it for the intro. It seems pretty rough but let me know what you think.

Your story sounds really good, could use a little more description. But overall it sounds really good.

What kind of help do you need?

What do you mean by more description? You mean by talking about some of the characters more deeply? I guess that I don't really need help but constructive critism on anything that you don't think should be in the intro or something that should be in the intro and I don't have there.

there are things in your story that seems cliche. hell hunter is right you need to put more description about the places like avon. since you're new here, that is what u should do. but the story overall seems good.

Story Rating: C+

anyway enjoy the boards newbie

Thanks for the info everyone who replied. Right now I'm working on characters, classes, NPCs, and enemies. Afterwards, I'll work on the cities and countries and then let you know what I've got. If anyone has anything else then feel free to let me know. Thanks

Good Luck!!

Well everything has been going pretty smoothly so far. Have all of my party members and other important characters set up but ran into a little problem. I have a character in my game that is a dragon. I have a dragon class but how can I make it so that no one else can become this class or that the dragon can't switch to any other class. Any help would be appreciated

What mode are you on? You'll probably want to be on Normal mode (change in Preferences). When you're in that mode, you can choose which people can be in the class you're making.

Or you could go to the class changing script, sort the member database number, and display a message/force script end if the number is for the dragon. That way he can't change classes.

Make a similar branch for when the player tries to become that class and make sure it is the dragon (who, I assume, can not change classes).

It should not be that complicated, depending upon your class system.

Good luck with it.

Peace.

Thanks for the info draygone and rodak. I'll work on that today. What about building my own continent. Is it me or is that one of the hardest things to do? Maybe it's just me though

It's something you just have to get used to. Too many button combinations, IMO.

Ok I tried getting it to where it wouldnt let others select a class and so that a certain party member wouldnt change classes but it never works. I also changed the preference to normal like someone told me to try but I couldnt find the option anywhere. Someone please help me.

Observe, for I have RPGM2 in my PS2 right now!
*turns on PS2 and does stuff*
*gets bored and finally starts using it*
Oh. My mistake. I thought there was a default way you can set who can be what classes. Guess not.

What exactly did you do to which scripts?

Ok here's the script that I put down.

1) Create a dummy class called "Can't Change".
2) Reorder your Classes so that "Can't Change" is spot 0 and "Dragon" is spot 1.
3) Put "Dragon: Rank 8" as a requirement for "Can't Change".
4) Put "Can't Change: Rank 8" as a requirement for "Dragon".
5) Go into the Script Editor and find the Script for the Class Shop.
6) Copy the Script and Paste it as a new Script.
7) Edit the new Script.
8) Between lines 014 and 015, enter the following lines:
Data: Member Info Load
Script Branch: Condition: Variable 088 'Class Number' = 1
Text: Clear Message
Text Content: Input: Display 'Common Name'
Text: ' can not change classes.'
Wait 20F
Script Branch End
Script Brand: Condition: Variable 088 'Class Number' /= 1
Script Branch End
9) Starting on line 023, highlight all the code until you come to four
consecutive Script Branch Ends, including the first two Script Branch Ends.
Copy.
10) Highlight the same code again, only this time, Delete.
11) Paste the copied codes between lines 021 and 022.


I think that number 9 is the problem because I don't know where the highlight option is. I hope that I'm not being a pain to anyone by repeating the same questions. I just really enjoy this game and I want my first game to be good. So far I have all of my characters, items, enemies, classes almost, and some scripts done. After I finally get the dragon class finished, I'll start working on learning to build cities and countries.

Boy I feel stupid. I finally learned how to make it so that I could create the dragon class and no one else could become a dragon and the dragon couldn't become anything else. I also learned to make where the dragon has a completely different class path then everyone else. It was complicated but i managed. Thanks for the help everyone. Now I have to mess around with and learn to create continents. Wish me luck

I am very impressed by what all you can do in this game. If you are creative the possibilities are unlimited. I didn't like the No Class selection in my options for selecting a class so I changed it into a help option. By clicking on it and then selecting a certain class, it will give you a brief explanation of what that class can do. I love this game.

I like the storyline a lot, I hope you finish it as i always have trouble doing with my games. Oh and nice name.

your noob to rpgmaker 2 then start trying to do less biger story because
rpg maker 2 is really hard to handle but the story and the idea seem good


here look:

The story and characters seem a tad cliche' to me, but I have high standards, so go ahead and ignore me.
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Why'd I reply?